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 Review #4151326 |
 | Shaky Marriage  [13+] A funny story about a married couple who cannot get along.  |
| (4.0)| Hi, Candie! This review is being given as part of the "Black Magic Birthday Review Bash" , presented by "The Dark Society" As a Registered Author, according to the stipulations above, you are a minor hex, and this review will lift the spell you cast.  HAPPY 8th! WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM  "Anniversary Reviews"  Overall Impression I liked this story for many reasons, for one, I wasn't sure if your character was a reliable narrator or not. Everything was so right in the beginning, and her thoughts seemed to dictate actions. Readers only see the story through her eyes. Setting/Plot/Characters I liked how the romantic moment occurred when the fireworks went off! No setting was specifically established, but the reader can draw from their own minds what the house and bar looked like. Two years later, the reader was subjected to a heated dialogue between Claire and John. They argued like crazy on fire. But it was a common enough argument. Claire not believing John. I wondered what Claire would do in her mood of vindication and retribution. At this point, I was still wondering if the whole story was being told. And John called the fire department saying Claire had problems. Throwing in more doubt! What a mess, that makes for a great read. She cuts cucumbers on the way to the mall? A few perplexes How did the wife throw all those things up on the roof from the bottom of the house? Clothes don't weigh very much. How did the husband know the wife called the fire department? What happened when Claire did not know how to use a fire extinguisher? What did she do wrong? Spray herself? walked over to his precious [viper]. Viper  In closing The last line concluded the plot in a satisfying way. As you probably intended, I thought Claire was off to kill her husband. But she found a much more elegant way to hurt him. From the conclusion, Claire's had enough of John. I hope she finds someone who really loves her. Even if she is a little crazy.    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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