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 | Dreamcatcher  [18+] What happens when a dreamcatcher is full? 120 word flash  |
| (4.5)  Hiya Arakun! This review is being given as part of the "Black Magic Birthday Review Bash" , presented by "The Dark Society"  I love dreamcatchers and even made one before so I was drawn to your title!  The idea of a dreamcatcher being full is also intriguing and a cool thought!Wow! Your weaving is just scarey to ponder and imaginative as well. Puts me in mind of Hitchcock's story of the spider who kept coming back larger in the man's mind. I would not want to be your character. It is amazing to get a whole story down in so few words but your setting, background and character are set quickly and I can imagine his sleep. Contrast in the second paragraph paints a darker picture with descriptive clarity.  I like how you leave room for us to imagine our own terrors of "other captives". We are left to imagine in the end and it is not hard. LOL I like the repeated words here as emphatic of the epic proportions of the fear. The last phrase speaks volumes in my imagination. Whew! It was easy to follow your weave and the only thing I thought was you might want to change adverbs to more vivid descriptors. eg. "appreciatively" is a bit unwieldy. I am not a flash writer but I have heard that adverbs are not the best. Still, it makes for a lively read in which imaginations can be activated! At least there were no spiders,...   Thanks for sharing your vision and craft! Have a great time at WDC 15th Birthday bash! 
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