![]() ![]() |
![]() What brought the Hand of THiNG to your port? ![]() What Does THiNG think about while perusing your item? ![]() ![]() My favorite part was the cliff hanger at the end, though - that was humorous to me and the guy named Marrow who was the Reaper. I have never heard the name Marrow before, but somehow it fits. I thought that here you had something where you meant to come back to fix it and didn't do it. It is in the third paragraph down from the top. You have: "a man dot thing her" Based on the context, I think it might be "a man comforting her" that you intend. I saw a typo here and there that you will catch with a good, thorough read-through, if you are so inclined. What does THiNG applaud about while reading your item? I applaud the doing good with powers while having a sense of humor about what is going on. The observational humor was very droll and it amused me. These humans can be so amusing, can't they? Nice work, Thornton ![]() ![]() THiNG a.k.a. HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. 4ps ![]() ![]() I am not an expert on poetry or prose or much else. I am merely a reader who loves to read. I am pretty much done with editing as I realize that more and more I do not enjoy doing that. I read and review and react to what I read on the page. So, this is not a detailed edit. I did point out one thing that was obvious, but that was about it for me. This is primarily a review, which is my reaction to the writing at hand, based on my own experiences. So, with that in mind, take the review for what it is worth - which is one ordinary soul's opinion. If I send a review, it means I enjoyed my reading experience enough to let you know it. ![]() ![]() Ta Ta until we meet again.... "Avoiding Toothless Rabid Bullies & Such" ![]() ![]() ![]()
|