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| A pleasant hour Rozebud   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Title: The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and create their first impression to the piece, so title should have a magnetic charm to allure or entice a reader.And thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece that I've found in your Portfolio. Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Just try to chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.  WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE: The title of your piece is good for me, I liked the word "tale" you used there, my impression is this is not just only a story to tell, but a story that you can pick or learn on it. I usually encounter that word "tale" in children books or old story that at the end of my reading, a wisdom I picked. Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader. The format of your story is good for me, its appealing and there's a proper paragraphing, and every thought and incidents are needed. The plot is about - fathers have different journey or path in life and it depends on what they would choose. every father have its own car and they are the one who drives on it. Setting- This is also important, a well chosen word can create a nice and balance imagery, that will give the reader continuously intact to the story until it reach its end. The setting of your story is good, the words created are well, it doesn't seem to be crowded. And it holds me until I reach the end part. Length - A proper length of a story can entice a reader also too read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the reader bored. The length of your story is good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see all the incidents and emotions that are going through by the characters. Grammar and Punctuation - I didn't see any word that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise. MY FINAL THOUGHT Just like other tale, I am blown by your piece. just like I am seeing my self's reflection in a clear water. The only thing that differs is, I am the water that the reflection becomes blur when it touch. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You portrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5 Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Until next time. ** Image ID #1979236 Unavailable **    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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