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| A pleasant hour Henny Penny   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from "Invalid Item" I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" And this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece that I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio. Please remember that I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.   MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :In every community its not complete if there are no gossips, maybe that makes every one thrill sometimes. WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE :Title: is one of the important part of a piece,I considered it as the face of every poem, because it is the first part where in a prospective reader have its first glance and create its first impression on that piece, so title should be enticing or captivating to read. The title of your piece is somehow allures me, you used a girl's name and it creates an intriguing on my part what is all about Hanna and the brief description there as a little fun. Imagery - is one of the important part also of a piece.It is the body of the poem. In that way, it talks about what inside that piece and will determine if that piece is enjoyable to read.A good crafted and well chosen words can create a vivid imagery and can stir emotions that the reader can't notice already because it holds the reader's thought and emotion. The words that you weaved in your piece is good for me, I liked the story behind it.imagery are vivid , the incidents are easily to catch, the flow its good and create a funny feeling, makes some one smile.just like I read a very short story that is compact and you used it in a poetry form. Rhyme, Rhythm and Form - this is important also in a poetry because when it was properly done, using any rhyming pattern and the form or rhythm, line breaks and punctuation it helps to stimulate emotions, and it test the wittiness of the writer. The rhyme,rhythm and form of your piece for me is good. I like how you created its rhyming pattern, some author post and include it below their rhyming pattern, I like also the rhyming because it blends with the rhythm. There are no abrupt while reading it. DOUBT AND SUGGESTION : I didn't find any word that can distract the flow. I just wonder why you don't use some punctuation Like on the fourth stanza Some lines there are need to have question mark And a quote punctuation because it is a dialogue.  MY FINAL THOUGHT :This really a little fun, I like how different people react to every situation, Specially if they are not really don't know the main reason and cause. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4. Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Until next time.  ** Image ID #1979236 Unavailable **  
  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 06/19/2014 @ 12:04am EDT