What brought the Zombie Hand of THiNG to your port?

I am a judge for "Journey Through Genres: Official Contest"  and am reading the entries - thanks for entering!

What Does Zombie THiNG think about while perusing your item?

I think when things seem to good to be true, they probably are that and then some. This gave me chills in a good way. I wish she would have listened more attentively to the Elder guy.

Does Zombie tHiNg have Suggestions?

I thought it was very creepy and suspenseful and well written. I thought I might mention a couple of things I saw -

I noticed a minor typo in about the 11th paragraph down from the top.

You have this:

"It was an odd gathering of people in different period clothing; not just from hers, but from each another's attire."

I think that next to last word should be "other's" instead of "another's".

Then further down, you have this sentence where Jodi is speaking to the Elder:

"Please, may have directions to my home? "

I think you need the word "I" between "may" and "have".


What does THiNG applaud about while reading your item?

I felt I could identify with Jodi's enthusiasm at first and the gradual dawning of a horrible realization about the truth. For some reason Gated Communities have always given me the chills, so that fit right in with her discoveries. The title fit that perfectly and the ending caught me by surprise, which is always a good thing.

I also was struck by this timely sentence:

"Sometimes the familiarity of your present misery is better than the unknown evil, of what lies beyond."

That summed up how I feel about leaving the health insurance gougers and going into any Health Care exchange while holding the hand of the GOVERNMENT. *Shudder*



I wish I was kidding about that.

Nicely done, WW, great incorporation of current events!



THiNG a.k.a. HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. 4ps

DISCLAIMER

I am not an expert on poetry or prose. I am merely an undead reader who loves to read and a volunteer judge for this contest.

END OF DISCLAIMER

Ta Ta until we meet again....

"Avoiding Toothless Rabid Bullies & Such" 


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