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The first paragraph hooked me with the water dripping. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace.

A typo in this phrase, you new that, I suggest changing new to knew.

The characters, especially Ivy and Daisy, are sympathetic. I like the way this chapter ends because it makes me wonder what Cory Topham is up to. Write on.

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