Hi

I have just read your item "Down at the Inn"  and these are my humble comments. I send them in a hope that they can be helpful to you, but note that these are personal opinions and are by no means better than yours.

First Impression:
Wow this was a thriller. There is a secret affair, a double crossing, a few missing people, some murders, a crazy pshyco, and and investigation that doesnt let you know what happened until the end. This was great.


Suggestions:
My only suggestions would be to add a bit more scenery to the story. You named her Lady Marion and had the King trust her with the money, but I would have liked more medieval settings and maybe traditions remind me where they were. But I must admit, being such a short story this might be a bit hard to do.

Plot / Characters:
As I mentioned the plot was great, and I was in suspense right to the end.

Structure & Grammar:
No suggestions here, all good to me.


Thank you for sharing your work, it was a great read.

Samantha
sssam-on the way back