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*Pencil* [Overall Impression]
A creative way to incorporate a song into a poem. The title fits the item perfectly.

*Tools* [Spelling Errors/Grammar]
None that I could find.

*Idea* [Suggestions]
As I read your poem I enjoyed it, but I felt the following would have a better ring to it. Now, this is just my opinion with the purpose to help only.

I offer the hands of hope

If meant to be,
it will work out.
Trust in the hands
that I reach out to you.


I offer the hands of hope

Keep holding on,
nothing can change destiny.
I'm here for you,
when there is no other way.


I offer the hands of hope

We will make it through,
the mists of despair,
and nothing will stop us,
that is the truth.

I offer the hands of hope,
so keep holding on.

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I offer the hands of hope
so keep holding on.

*Pencil* [Ending Thoughts]

I enjoyed reading your poem, and I truly hope you when your contest. I saw a few places that I felt could use some tinkering, but it is only my opinion. I think you have tremendous talent, and I enjoy reading your work. I hope you continue sharing your creative mind with all of WDC. Keep up the great work.

Write On!






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