Hi Dawn Embers

I have just read your work. Shine On. and here is my review of this poem
I and sending you this, in a hope that my humble opinion as a reader can be useful to you.


Overall impression :

This is an inspirational read, and I really enjoyed the message and the theme. We all need that helpful push in life that tells us to shine on and forget about the comments from the people that do not understand us.

Structure :
The structure was simple with an easy rhyme scheme to follow. Your imagery was great and I must say that I can imagine the penguin hat with matching scarf and green tights.



Suggestions :
My only suggestion would be to check the length of the 1st and 3rd lines on the second stanza. Either they are both that bit too long, or the 2nd line is too short.. it seems the syllable lengths aren't the same there and I did stumble on the flow on that bit.


Overall it is a great read.


Thank you for sharing your work.
I look forward to reading more soon.


Samantha
sssam-on the way back