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Apostasy: The Book of Ithaca Open in new Window. [18+]
When all that one believes is questioned, where do we turn to find the truth?
by J. M. Kraynak Author Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi J. M.,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

*Key*Chapter: I just read chapter 1 of your novel, Apostasy: The Book of Ithaca.

*Key*Title: Chapter 1 rev. 1

*Key*Author: J. M. Kraynak

*Key*Plot:
*Paw*A plague is killing many, many folks, and Valimaar and Lady Elaine are trying to find a way to stop it.

*Key*Style & Voice:
*Paw*Comes across loud and clear.

*Key*Referencing:
*Paw*Medieval time period

*Key*Scene/Setting:
*Paw*You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Key*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Key*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*Key*Characters:
*Paw*Valimaar, Lady Elaine

*Paw*Grammar:
My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

*QuestionB*Spelling: "I know of a small suspected cult that survived the wytch hunts.” -- I’ve been seeing witch spelled wytch in titles of book, yet is this the spelling you were going for?

*QuestionP*Missed punctuation: She was a young woman, no older than twenty five by his guess. -- I was taught to write twenty five like this: twenty-five.

*Key*Showing vs. Telling: This chapter seems more telling than showing with all the narrative.

*Key*Just My Personal Opinion: It’s hard to tell the thoughts of the characters from the rest of the narrative.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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