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Apostasy: The Book of Ithaca Open in new Window. [18+]
When all that one believes is questioned, where do we turn to find the truth?
by J. M. Kraynak Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Prologue revised 11/27/12" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi J. M.,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

*Key*Chapter: I just read the porlogue of your novel, Apostasy: The Book of Ithaca.

*Key*Title: Prologue rev. 2

*Key*Author: J. M. Kraynak

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about murder will find this an interesting beginning.

*Key*Plot:
*Paw*At this point I’m not sure what this novel will be about.

*Key*Style & Voice:
*Paw*The writing is in active voice.

*Key*Referencing:
*Paw*I have no reference as to what time period this tale is being told in.

*Key*Scene/Setting:
*Paw*You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Key*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*Key*Characters:
*Paw*The attacker comes across quite believable.
*Paw*What little is revealed about the nun shows she’s a simple woman with a simple life. The attacker seems to be a blood thirsty killer who love killing.

*Paw*Grammar:
My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Everything seems to be alright.

*Key*Showing vs. Telling: Seems okay at this point.

*Key*Just My Personal Opinion: I wish you would have given us a little more to go one. I’m not sure what kind of tale this is going to be. Yet I am curious enough to read the first chapter.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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