Hello,

I really want to thank you for participating in Sensual Moments, Vol. II, Round 1 in October. It’s been an enlightening experience creating a prompt and then waiting patiently for someone to write about it because they want to, as opposed to having to write about it.

Things I liked about this read:
The descriptions of the characters and settings create a visual display for the reader to enjoy. The story is paced in such a way that it is easy to see what is happening in my vivid imagination.

Flow of this read:
While building on the character Robert Barnes, you’ve created a story of a strong, virile blacksmith worthy of his conquests. Oh, how the story builds to a wonderful climax, and all the while Lady Bertha has sense enough to be calculating and plotting, (I think I’d be too lost in the moment to be thinking that hard). The ending creates a feeling that Robert and his bride are just as calculating as good old Bertha.

Suggestions: There were just a couple of places I stopped and went, I wonder if I’m thinking clearly about this- one was in the first paragraph when you’re introducing Bertha, as oversexed. I was wondering if she was feeling ‘under-sexed’ since she was restless and fidgety, and her toys were just not enough to satisfy.

The second was in the paragraph where Robert was ogling Bertha- braless breasts- It made me question, did they have bras back then? My mind does wander so…

Final Note (Over All Opinion):
I really enjoyed the tale you wove with the Nursery Rhyme “Robert Barnes”.

Now I’m looking forward to the festivities coming this weekend. But somehow, I don’t think the blacksmith at the Antique Farm Machine Weekend will even come close to your version of a blacksmith!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Katrina