This is a WDC Power Reviewer Review. I am not a professional copy editor. These are my opinions as a writer, reader, and lover of words. Please take or leave my opinions as you will. Overall Impression: I thought this opening chapter was very cute. It reminded me a great deal of Harry Potter or the X-men, but it was different enough that I was willing to give it a chance. Plot: A girl is sent to a boarding school for children of unusual abilities. The typical young people relationship stuff begins and we get a peek at some of the other children's abilities. Characters: I liked your main character, Sassy. She seemed spunky enough, but not overblown. The name is a little farfetched, but perhaps there is a reason for that later in the story. Dialog: The dialog certainly fit the age of the characters, young teens. I felt like I was back in school again. Grammar and Mechanics: I did not spot any obvious grammar errors. You have proofed this well. Suggestions: It felt like you had thrown a bit too much about the school and all the characters all at once. I'd try and pace yourself a little more. Give out a little less information in one sitting, so to speak. However, overall I did like your story and would like to read more of it at a later time. I hope you'll continue to work on your story. Take care. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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