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Oct 1, 2017 at 5:19pm
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On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please
LinnAnn -book writer is asking for some advice:

I write of Lili as first person. but she is asleep, so this is 3rd. right.? does it work/?

ā€œEli, thank you so much for all your help in rescuing my sons. Iā€™m exhausted and very hungry.ā€ I staggered and nearly fell. Eli caught me.
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After she had eaten she snuggled down under the down comforter and fell asleep. Again Eli lay on top of the covers, his arms around her, protecting her dreams, and protecting her. No one was going to get to her again. He sent feelings of love and safety to her as she slept.
ā€œHow do I tell you how much I love you?ā€ he whispered. He did not dare Mindspeak to her now that she could hear him. ā€œHow do I tell you without frightening you away? How can I convince you that you also love me?ā€ He kissed her fingertips gently, caught himself and stopped. He could not, not until she agreed to become his wife. ā€œI will convince you Dear One. I will find a way, somehow, to heal the hurts inflicted upon you.ā€



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Michelle

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On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please · 10-01-17 5:19pm
by BattywynšŸŽ¶
Re: On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please · 10-01-17 5:38pm
by Joy-the Harpy Witch
Re: On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please · 10-01-17 5:45pm
by Travelin' Waltz
Re: On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please · 10-01-17 6:28pm
by Anders J. Skeleton
Re: Re: On behalf of LinnAnn - advice, please · 10-01-17 9:03pm
by LinnAnn -book writer

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