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Copy --- note date Review of The Sleigh Of Blessings Review to ~LL~ We Got This! (223) In affiliation with AUTHORS DISCUSSION CLUB Rated: E | (5.0) Access: Public Hiding a review instantly removes it from your view. Public reviews that have been hidden are not displayed on the public review listing page. Given: Feb 21, 2015 at 8:46am Length: 2,395 Characters | 2,388 w/o WritingML FEBRUARY 21, TWENTY-FIFTEEN Good morning goes out to Life Lessons, here on a stalwart, colder winter day. Your pleasantly rendered submission to "EVERYONE HAS A CHRISTMAS STORY" Namely: STATIC The Sleigh Of Blessings (E) How one man makes a difference #2021541 by ~LL~ We Got This! (223) ... hails loudly and clearly replete with Christmas generosity. Final passages concerns Larry's life as a Secret Santa no more ... as his "sleigh" spreads across town. The sleigh in question -- incidentally (in sum) wrangles applause from town sfolks, a helpful neighbor and myself, reading about Larry's jaunts in his van, bearing food. What became unclear was where he parks it, laden with ... wrapped sandwiches and goodies. Ah yes ... on that side of town. Where people were hungry. You see, Life Lessons, this theme took on life of its own. For ten long years (as the story goes) single guy Larry hands out his gifts without being seen. Then he's overtly on " .. the side that is forgotten." In his home town. RE: character foibile --- Much is spent on why Larry did not want to call attention to himself as if that is a character fault. First he's dappy, then he aint sorta. Sleigh consturction is well delivered. Jeff joins Larry during the project. Of the place, a town. Well, it is not forgotten by those whom abide there, supposing these are blocks worth as side implies. Later the turn of events --- Nor as the story concludes --- shall these needy hence evermore continue to be ignored. Children gabbing for treats .. eh ..? Painting the poor happens. Adding the title of the shop where donations change Lar's life almost begins another chapter. For now, picturing all those non-addled, aides de down trodden smashing into boxes, peeling back hand-me-downs as life goes on betwixt fictitious volunteers in an unknown state, in an unknown place. Setting here is close and fine. However, added geographic research could supply another aspect for short stories. Namely: Education. Suggest: Realty sites. Meanwhile, what comes to mind is -- "Don't we seem to wish this type of sharing might come to pass amongst our populations?" TEFF When, of course, it does and is not hidden at all. The meaning of our conception of a traditional Christmas topic does indeed extend to such merry, happy wishes present in story content. Good Luck in the contest, dear author. Winners list coming soon. Rev sent Cordially from TEFF "BURY MY HEART ON VALENTINE'S DAY" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" . You have not yet received a response to this review. Length: 426 Characters | 407 w/o WritingML FEBRUARY 10, 2015 OH MY! This is really great. Not only does the poet/ author neilbco (35) relate this story-like poem with rhyme and success, the presentation makes one want to hold it close for awhile. The dialog usage betwixt the confessing sorceress and her mate sound touchingly honest. That sparks a romantic flair for this reader. Thanks for this one, listed on Auto REWARDs. Cordially, TEFF "RIDING THE WRITERS WAVE" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" . You received an email response to this review 02/10/2015 @ 7:19pm EST .com Auto Rewards Column. In a way natural details pertaining to Rena's walk including terrain vista seems your story's strong point. Hoping you are also into other stories which call upon nature. Best all 2015, Happy St. Val's Rev sent -- Cordially from TEFF My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" . You have not yet received a response to this review. |
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