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Yeah, I aggree with your assessment based on thw work so far, but the longer piece actually develops more characters, such as his parents with their own problems, I'm adding a sister into the plot, There's a first girlfriend before he meets his wife which gives more depth to the plot idea itself, and overall it is a lot more involved. I know where I want to take it, I just don't know how to get there...I should probably move this over to your fancy new "rewrite-athon" forum...

I personally like #2 as well, but i fell like it only tells one sixth of the story, which isn't exactly a good feeling to have. But on the other hand I'd really like to keep it in one perspective, which #3 would be nearly impossible to accomplish through. Id have to switch 1st person narration, or move into 3rd person, whicgh doesn't give me the feel I want. I do aggree with you about #4. I tried writing in that today during class, and it just turned into one long monotonous piece of writing.

Thanks for the input.

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