Oh, interesting comment! I hadn't looked at it like that but I see what you mean. To me, it seemed one of those prompts that tells the story for you and I was just attempting to subvert that by taking an unusual line. They addressed me as the father, so I thought about how I'd feel as the father and expressed that, at the same time avoiding having to continue a story in which the punchline has already been stolen by the prompt.
As regards mystery, that comes of having only one half of a conversation - we never hear what the daughter is saying and have to work that out for ourselves. ;)
LOL, Blueyez, I can't deny the thought of WDC crossed my mind as I was writing this. But typos are sent to plague me. No matter how many times I edit, there's always at least one that slips through.
I do not care for future me
who lives somewhere I do not see;
it’s my comfort I nurture now
when irksome tasks do crease my brow.
I put them off and send them on
for future self to slave upon,
and turn my back upon the thought
how hard his days with chores I bought.
But now I fear that some dark day
my future me will go away,
for his resentment grown so vast
had worn his patience down at last;
departed for some Shangri-La,
he sings of freedom on guitar
and I be left with endless tasks,
while he in tropic sunshine basks.
Line count: 16
Rhymed couplets, 8 syllables per line
For Cards Against Authors, Week 1
Prompt Card: You’re afraid of your future self.
Wild Card: Metaphor: Emotional growth as a fragile seed.
Note: Patience grows to resentment.
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