They were both in a screaming machine, thunderous wind buffeting, mouths shouting silence.
They were falling out the door, falling from the sky, falling together, falling and accelerating, falling in exhilaration, falling in love.
With a banging crack a silken plume swelled instantly into their sky hook, and they cried out, laughing, floating towards the grassy paddock below.
The ground rushed towards them. There were shouts of joy as they reunited with the others.
Victory is thudding in their chests, hearts clanking in relief, and adrenaline.
First edit. Fixed the spelling of buffetting - buffeting, exhilleration - exhilaration, addrenaline - adrenaline. Changed the tense of the last sentence to present was - is.
Second edit.
Removed the description "there were shouts of joy" and inserted dialogue. Removed the second "towards". Changes and added to last sentence.
They were both in a screaming machine, thunderous wind buffeting, mouths shouting silence.
They were falling out the door, falling from the sky, falling together, falling and accelerating, falling in exhilaration, falling in love.
With a banging crack a silken plume swelled instantly into their sky hook, and they cried out, laughing, floating towards the grassy paddock below.
The ground came up to meet them.
"Ahhhhhh! Ohhhhhhh! AWESOME.......AWESOME!"
"You didn't tell me you were jumping then! You didn't..."
"Ha ha ha, but you wouldn't have relaxed, you'd have tensed up...anyway it was awesome, eh?"
"Yeah, it was great!"
They reunited with the others.
Victory is thudding in their chests, their hearts clanking in relief, faces pale with maxed out adrenaline.
Third Edit.
Added realism change to the end of dialogue. I felt that someone would already be tense enough before a skydive.
They were both in a screaming machine, thunderous wind buffeting, mouths shouting silence.
They were falling out the door, falling from the sky, falling together, falling and accelerating, falling in exhilaration, falling in love.
With a banging crack a silken plume swelled instantly into their sky hook, and they cried out, laughing, floating towards the grassy paddock below.
The ground came up to meet them.
"Ahhhhhh! Ohhhhhhh! AWESOME.......AWESOME!"
"You didn't tell me you were jumping then! You didn't..."
"Ha ha ha, but you wouldn't have relaxed, you'd have tensed up...anyway it was awesome, eh?"
"Yeah, it was great! But I was never going to relax up there, before the GO!"
They reunited with the others.
Victory is thudding in their chests, their hearts clanking in relief, faces pale with maxed out adrenaline.
Sparky
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