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| Alright, there is something about third-person writing that makes my head want to effin explode. When I read it, I find it harder to pay attention than when something is in first-person narration. Then when it comes to writing in third-person it feels like I'm stuck trying to "tell the story" but all of a sudden, the story that I wanted to tell is very choppy and flat and no fun at all. WHAT THE HELL IS WRING WITH ME!!!!!! Here's my plan, I'm going to do what one of my teachers loves to tell us to do, "write your way through it." I'm not exactly sure how this is going to work, but I guess it'll do something. Last night, I told myself that I wasn't going to write another story in first-person until I can honestly say that I have a good grip on third-person writing. But I gave myself a loop hole (I know that's pathetic isn't it....) I 've been meaning to experiment with second-person a bit more, so instead of dealing with third-person, I was going to play with second person. (note: it was a very sour attempt to fool myself into believe that I can avoid third-person forever). I figure that i'll staart by writing a small scene in first person and then try to translate it into third-person. her goes: I'm so tired of coming this same stupid as cafeteria and sitting next to those big haired, robotic as cheerleaders day after day after day. "Then leave," said Thomas. "What? What are you talking about- I don't have anywhere to go, jackass" "If you're sick of them, then leave. You don't need anywhere to go, just leave, " said Thomas, "its not like anyone wants you here." Alright, why in the hell is my best friend telling me to leave and go to some place that doesn't exist? Isn't he supposed to be the one here to comfort me when I'm feeling like shit? Alright, that was me writing in first-person, completely freelanced, whatever. Not bad- I think. Now the desire here it to write this thin in thrid-person without losing any of the live from the piece. here goes: Jeff is sick and tired of going to same cafeteria day after day after day and sitting next to these big-haired, robotic as cheerleaders. "Then leave," said thomas. "What? What do you mean then leave- I don't have anywhere to go, Jackass?" said jeff. "If you're sick of them then leave. you don't need anywhere to go, just leave," said thomas, "its not like anyone wants you here anyway." Thomas can't figure out why its his best friend that's telling him to leave and go to some place that doesn't even exist. Isn't Thomas supposed to comfort jeff when he's feeling like shit? I know, I know- don't cry, its not that bad is it? This is what I mean, the third-person narration has expectedly flopped. I'm think that its flopping because its harder in thrid person to describe mental states with completely screwing up the natural flow of a scene. In first person its not that hard, you know that how we think, in progression; something happens and we react mentally. In third person you have to find a way to make that reactiion a apparent but still keep the action moving. I can imagine that when I set my vantage point further back that is that much harder to do without seemin invasive. All-in-all, I think that I'll be doing a whole lot of third-person writing, and reading even more of it. later |
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