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| "Oh, God, make me a hollow reed, from which the pith of self hath been blown so that I may become as a clear channel through which Thy Love may flow to others." Part of a well-known prayer among Baha'is, although not attributable to 'Abdu'l-Baha or George Townsend. (I checked the source, Prosperous Snow celebrating1) Basically... we get in the way... our 'pith' so to say. Some things work best when hollow. It seems to work well with what Sonali wrote. To THANKFUL SONALI Library Class! re "06/22/2023-'hollow'"  : "I really like this. This message is 'solid'. I'd tweak it to make sure the rhythm is perfect though because it demands a smooth flow (like a flute). The rhymes work (wallow/follow not many options with hollow.) Consider: I'm saying (you/I/we) need not dwell or wallow. Some things NEED to be hollow." Yeah, yeah, yeah... Elle - on hiatus reminded us all about the snail mail group "The Snail Mail Forum" . Sonali, Neva, Elycia and Elle are all a part of that group. And yeah, I owe everyone postcards or letters or something. A small booklet might be nice.That said, the group could use new members. Many have gone inactive for sundry reasons. To Elycia Lee ☮ re "Pocket Letters Pending " : "Cute but it would need to be sent as a package? I truly need to make some small booklets that fit into a regular size envelope (that varies by country; in the US a sheet of paper folded twice works; in Thailand?). If I'm smart I could hand-write, draw and print (adding color with pencils to personalize). I've printed out booklets in the past. I keep forgetting that you're part of the Snail Mail group.  "Where do you get ideas? I read blogs and most anything else that's short. That quirk is helping me learn Thai! Still some combinations are beyond beyond at this point. Misreading can also help stimulate the brain. Even brain-farts matter when I'm desperate for ideas. To Vanishing Vapor re "Safe from the fire below" "I do like this! Love the line Myself, the bain of all ants. but I read it as 'brain' did you mean 'bane'? I like 'brain' better because it jars the... brain. I'd work with rhythm a bit to smooth the flow. Add a syllable, take one out. Maybe use 'can't' or 'don't' instead of 'doesn't' in line 5. And 'surely shows' instead of 'does show' in line 10 and 'volition' or 'permission' instead of 'the will' in line 11. It comes close to traditional forms (ballad comes to mind) so maybe this or one of your other poems would fit the Trad Poems contest once Brenda starts it up again." "We're all just farts in the wind."  "Fireproof" About 460 words. For
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