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Review by swamprat502
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I love the frst chapter of your story. There is not much wrong with it. The only thing I have noticed is that you have a few misspells. Keep writing. I want to read the next chapter. Leaf sounds like one of the heroes of the story, but the part that interests me most is the fact that I have very rarely ever seen a nerdy character as the main. I hope you use the jet fuel pump gun at the end of the story. That would just beat all.
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