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Rated: E | (4.5)
this is very good :) i get the point you are trying to get across but as a suggestion, there are a few typos you can fix

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-he huged me and press me gentle on his chest or he hugged me and pressed me, gentle, against his chest

-Yes, always when he saw me he holds me by my hand or Yes, everytime he sees me, he takes me by my hand




those are a few out of about 5 that i spotted...i really don't want to seem rude because i really like your poem! but making the grammar a bit better may make it easier to read :) keep up the good work*Heart*3
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