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Review by Rune Draegonne
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Consider limiting the number of times you use the word YOU in each stanza.

This is beautiful "eyes misted over with tears not yet fallen." Wonderful imagery. I would encourage you to consider where your pauses are. I feel it would flow more smothly in transition from stanza to stanza if some of the pause where tweaked and some lines broken a bit differently. For example:

Hope this helps!
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