Although slightly more than slightly chauvanistic, this piece was funny. You should have went into more detail with what the girls were doing rather than what it made you feel. That should have been a side note. I would have also put in there exactly what guys think happen at slumber parties. And on a side note, there are pillow fights sometimes. And sometimes makeout contests. We just dont let guys know it.
First let me say that I totally agree with you. You're the first person I found that felt the same way.
Second your vocabulary is astounding. Your grammar usage is great. The description is beautiful. You should send it in to reader's digest. Honestly.
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