HI it's me Newby! I really enjoyed this writing. Very visual as I read it I recalled the first time I kissed the man that is now my husband. Even tho it had very little in common with the experience in your poem. I think it is a wondering talent to be able to describe things as you do. I'm more stright forward with it, but I want to attempt to not to be so stright forward in my writing.
Bravo! I struggle from time to time with my faith, but I always return to the one that loves me unconditionally and forgives me upon my request. Tears flow when I feel God's great love and that I'm worthy of his love, grace and forgiveness. This the second writing I've read of yours and I truly want to say your blessed with talent of writing. God Bless!
Interesting question. One that no one could really truly answer unless they've been through it. A big problem in the world is that humans have a tendency of believing what was taughtto us as children. Even if it maybe wrong we want to believe it's the truth and right way to go. That's how racism got started and grows. It's a question that makes me to look within and think.
Very good work! I can relate I swear that hear the voices of my loved ones that has passed over and it always lifts my spirits when I neeed it the most.
Readers could very easily relate to this writing.
Packs a punch! Loosing Josh has effected all of us in different ways. Using the visual image of a cloudy day and cry made it very visual for me. Keep writing just remember write from the heart and don't let your mind get in the way of your creativity.
Nice work. It stirred up emotions within me. The rhyming scheme was very good. That's something I struggle with from time to time. I'm looking forward to reading more of the work produced my your magical fingers.
This is real good just a couple corrections needed it's aimlessly and you capitalize God. This is all I would say to correct. I think you did a winderful job with an emotional topic.
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