I still can't get over how good of a writer you are. I like this poem as well as your others. The only thing I would change is the length. Again I just think you have to much talent to be writing short poems. You should try to make them longer. It would show off your skills alot more. Keep up all the good work though, and Good Luck with your writing.
~Manna Cue~
I believe that this one is good short. I can deffenitly feel alot of emotion with this poem. My mother passed away in 2005 with cancer. I was still in high school. I had to do alot of things that she did to help my dad out after she passed; pay bills, take care of my dad and my grandma, etc. This one hits real close to home for me. Keep up all the good work. I really like this one.
~Manna Cue~
Again this is a good poem but a little short in my opinion. I like long poems, but for some people short is better. This is a very sad poem. I felt much saddness when I read it. Did this really happen to you? If so I feel for you. Keep your head up. You are a good writer.
~Manna Cue~
I really like this peom, but I do think that it should be a little bit longer. I think that this topic with what you have already writen, is something alot of people can relate to. Thats a great thing. It will touch alot of people in different ways. But it should be longer to get that dramatic affect that a poem like this should have. It is good though. Keep up the good work and think about making it longer. Good Luck with your writing.
~Manna Cue~
Wow! That was a really good poem. Tell your daughter she did a great job. I know how she feels. My mom passed away in 2005 with cancer. I took care of her the whole time she was sick. I can say that it is hard and don't let anyone tell you that it will all be okay. Trust me it won't. But, it will get easier to live with it just takes time. But there will always be those things that he liked or even songs. Just keep you head up. Both of you, and good luck with everything.
~Manna Cue~
Well, this was very interesting poem. Not what I expected. But in the same respect it was good. I don't think I could have ever wrote a poem about coffee. So I would like to say CONGRATZ. You pulled it off and it was good. I could have never wrote anything about something like that I don't think. Keep up the good work.
~Manna Cue~
I think that this is a good poem. I do think you should make it just a little bit longer. Not alot just a little. This is a topic alot of people including myself can relate too. But, keep your head up. You can't change the past but you can make your own tomarrow. I believe that is something to think about. Keep writing, I think you have the potintal to be a great writer.
~Manna Cue~
This poem is awsome. I thought it was funny and in a way true about certain things. You did a great job. Keep it up. I love the way you used chickens to relate with everyday life. The analigy(sp) was great. I will be reading more of your stuff. You are a very interesting righter. Keep up the good work.
~Manna Cue~
I would first like to say that this is a great thing for someone to write about. You are right it needs to be noticed. I do think you should add to this poem though. I think it is really good, but to short and doesn't really paint much of a picture, if you know what I mean. But other then that keep up the writting I think you will do great.
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