This was a very good, although extremely frightening story. I think there should have been more about the "thing" and a little more description. Would have caused a lot more chills up and down the spine.
The reason this is a 4 instead of a 5 is the use of the "F" word, I just dont believe it is necessary.
I recently have had the experience of my mother passing away in July 03. She was so very precious to me, a exact example of compassion, and love. Your poem ends with a very telling prophecy. She will live on forever in your heart and mind. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece.
We must remember that not all people will believe as we do. What is right and justified for me, may not be for you. HONOR is a great thing, we must also remember to keep in our minds that it takes a lot of COURAGE to remain HONORABLE at many times in our life. I thank you for a very compeling piece of work. WRITE ON!!!!!
The frankness of her mother asking "THE" question is a big part of this chapter. That is something, I am sure does not happen often. This is really good writing, I am enjoying it a great deal.
This chapter threw me for a loop, the physical manifestation of their love was not expected. It was something I am sure would occur in real life, as your words give life to this story. I am my friend "hooked", I only wish I had the time to read it all in one session. Salut to the Incurable.
Jim,
The emotion is tremendous, finally after three long years, to hod each other in their arms, WOW, the feelings of love and compassion pour out of this chapter. Again my friend, you are a true talent.
This is a great story, I can relate indirectly to this situation for I have a couple of friends who went through a similiar time. Though not quite the age difference, I know they feel the same way about each other. This is a real to true life story. I felt the emotions. I will continue to read until I complete this fantastic tale. Thank you for sharing.
Lonewolf
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