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Review of Lucy  
Review by Jared__Burch
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the flow and word choice of the poem. the emotions are very relate able. I think Lucy is a cigarette but it could be marijuana so i would make that a little more clear. i like how its clear that the speaker really cares and feels passionately about "Lucy". really amazing job overall.
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Review of My Love  
Review by Jared__Burch
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem so much! There is absolutely nothing i would change. i love the word choice especially "spicy aroma" and "toxic magic". the flow of the poem was amazing and easy to keep up with. the ending was perfect for this poem. i love everything about it. i love the butterflies fluttering in your heart instead of your stomach. i love the use of fragile wings right after the butterfly reference. I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Love  
Review by Jared__Burch
Rated: E | (3.0)
YES GURL! I used the same poem! anyway, very great job. i like how the poem stays on the original topic. I would change the word "unconditionally" because it is very overused especially in love poems. I also wouldn't use the word soul twice in the lines "your soul cant leave my lovely, innocent soul behind." I like the line "the feeling rages my soul" because it adds more emphasis on the emotion and tone of the poem.
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Review by Jared__Burch
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great poem! I really like your word choice at the end because it makes a deep statement and I feel that it is a great ending. I like the fifteenth line because when I read it I feel like I can hear the person speaking in a deep, heartbroken, tone. I would have said "could not- would not" instead of could to make the flow a little better. Great Job!
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