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Review of someday  
Review by lightkeeper
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I had reviewed your other poem earlier and just checked what else you have written. I so much enjoyed this one. In so few lines you have expressed your emotions with clarity and strength. Your words have painted a vivid picture and I feel I know the speaker so well. Unlike most of the new writers here, it is clear that you have talent and you should continue to express your emotions and thoughts in poetry. Okay, if you insist on a negative comment, please watch the grammer and spelling which detract from the overall presentation like dings on a shiny new car.
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Review of memories of us  
Review by lightkeeper
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
the lines from the beginning through "your touch" were well written and very strong in describing your feelings. the last four lines suffered from grammatical problems; but also weakly repeated the emotion conveyed in the first 7 lines. i would either delete or try to tighten and strenghten. a good effort and worth putting in additional work.
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