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Review of Redland's Revenge  
Review by Delia Parsnip
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I feel you captured the verbal abuse some of the worst teachers are capable of dishing out. While that was good, I feel like maybe writing with a thesaurus my benefit you in future entries. Also I feel that while your main character does experience growth but I feel like there’s a bit of a problem with pacing. Some scenes drag a bit. Perhaps think about what your characters want or need. Also consider “pinch points” and maybe look at arch types of plot like “the hero’s journey” or “save the cat”.(so for example say the protagonist wants the ultimate road bike. How do they get it? What do they do? What problems must the “hero” overcome?) Anyways from what I read you have potential. Keep polishing your craft.
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