Freaky poem with the time leaps. I was wondering how you would make this end, and for a 24 hour writing contest. I feel you created a lively character that grabs my attention. I don't know if you knew where the story was headed but felt that visit to the neighbor's could have caused more concern, and suggestions. Otherwise, I got a laugh because of the error in time keeping.

I guess I wonder why a boy delivered the note and how that 10 extra hours would finally sync up with real time because she got more. I think it could have been an extra day plus the lost hours.

I actually can see this as some kind of Adam Sandler movie or Will Ferrell and one gets lost in this time zone while the other is a bumbling idiot who tries all sorts of solutions to fix it and comedy ensures.

It was fun. Thanks,

Brian

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