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To Both my Mothers, Thank You  [E]
A Villanelle (described following poem) about two lives, one known and one not.
by Dan I Am
Review by StephBee
In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was a heartfelt tribute to two mothers.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

A sincere poem about what it's like to have a child, give it up for adoption, and yet, the emotional benefit weaves into the fabric of everyone involved.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a villanelle. A villanelle is a highly structured poem with 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain. There are 2 repeating rythmes and 2 repeating refrains. The poem followed the structure. I thought the repeating refrains were honest and sincere.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase font and make easier to read on the website.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Sixteen years, and not prepared for a son." This is a very honest, poignant statement and I think it's something we can all understand.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the readers and keeps them reading. The title is a heartwarming fit for the poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall.

Glowing Steph
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