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 Wicked Witch Was Framed!!!  [ASR]
People Called her the Wicked Witch Of the West, but she was framed, and I have PROOF! :)
by shadowfire
Review by Choconut
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi shadowfire ,

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I am reviewing this item, "Wicked Witch Was Framed!!!"  in affiliation with "The WDC Angel Army" . Please remember, any opinions stated are purely my own, and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful.


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What I liked


*StarV* Oh, this made me chuckle. The alternative (or, maybe, true) story of The Wizard of Oz. I love how you state your case, and say that it is proof that Dorothy was the real evil one in the story, and the Wicked Witches of the East and the West were harmless, mild-mannered witches. And, you know what? You make some good points. Dorothy did kill both the witches, and she did steal the Ruby Slippers and broomstick from them. You may be onto something with your theory.

*StarV* I would love to know your thoughts on the friends Dorothy takes with her to Oz. Are the Scarecrow, Tin Man and Lion equally evil? Because, they don't seem so bad. I mean, the Lion is scared of his own shadow. Say Boo! to him, and he would probably cry.

*StarV* What I love the most about this piece is your passion. I can believe you feel strongly that Dorothy was an Evil Girl, and you argue your point with humour and conviction. I love the last sentence: "P.S. If you see any falling houses around, with dead people underneath, and missing shoes from their dead bodies, it is a clear sign that the evil girl is back! :)" That made me laugh, and I'll be sure to take heed keep an eye out.

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Suggestions


I would love to see this as an actual story, rather than an essay-style piece. You could write it from the witch's point of view, or even from Dorothy's point of view, but showing her evil thoughts. Just rewrite the story. That would be really fun to read (and to write). You could even change it up a little, maybe have some kind of law person trying to catch Dorothy and her friends. Lots of possibilities.

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Parting Comments


I enjoyed reading this piece. You write with a lot of humour, and I love your alternate take on the famous story of Dorothy and friends as they journey towards Oz. Nice work.

Choconut

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