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 Equestria Girls:You Attend CHS  [E]
You attend Canterlot High as a new student and meet Twlight and her friends.
by brony89
Review by KingsSideCastle
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a cool interactive. The Equestria girls are cool characters. It would be fun to attend Canterlot high school with them. I am not as familiar with the series but my friend introduced me to the characters and showed me a couple of clips of the series so I at least know what the ponies look like both in human form and pony form. My favorites are Twilight Sparkles and Apple Jack. I like that they all have different personalities. I think that it would be fun to date Twilight. I like the idea of you encouraging authors to use *insert your name here* in place of the characters name. It adds a personal connection for the readers.

This interactive is still in the middle stage of development. It has some good chapters and story arcs going. There are also multiple authors contributing to it. The most developed story arcs seems to be with Sunset Shimmer and you give a lot of good options for her allowing the story to be set when she was a bully or after the movie when she was a lot nicer. I really like the storyline where the reader get to go on a date with her. It a fun fantasy scenario. I would love to see some similar arcs with Twilight.

A couple of tips. Interactives are set up so that earlier choices have more options. They start going down until they reach two choices the deeper you go in the interactive (5 for the first two chapters then 3 for the third and eventually 2). Basic and upgraded members have the option to add more choices. Try to take advantage of earlier opportunities to add more choices. The great thing about interactives is that they all for multiple possibilities so authors don't have to choose which way they want a story to go. It gives them a lot of freedom.

Anyway this is a great story. I hope that you continue to write more and expand it. Best of luck with your writing!

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