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 | Hope  [E] Why we wake up tomorrow after a miserable day.  |
| (5.0)| A "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Finding my way back  ReviewStoryline: With all the world's problems, one has to ask themselves why they even bother to keep going. What makes you want to get up in the morning, knowing the world will not have changed overnight. Knowing that the issues continue to grow. Spelling/Grammar Issues: CITIZENS TO BREATHE LESS. The only other thing I thought could be addressed would be breaking up the long section. It would be more visually appealing. It's easy to get lost in line when they are all clumped together in a very long section. Description: I loved the description of your girlfriend, which made me smile. You painted the world in 2017, the way it remains today. War, famine, disease, and poverty never seem to end. The only difference between now and then is which countries are now the object of these never-ending atrocities. You were spot-on when you said war becomes the global version of high school drama. It is so accurate I intend to start using that line! Good descriptions of a first date, your heart swelling, evil, and destruction. I was right there with you through all of it. Overall Impression: With all of the crap happening in our everyday lives, with leaders who make the decisions for us, whether we agree with them or not, you still hold out hope that perhaps one day, things will get better. It's all we have these days to cling to. Final Thoughts: Though this started as a dark piece, you tied it up nicely and brought about hope by the end. It's easy to get caught up in the negative and let it rule your life. I'm glad some things still give you hope that the world can change and that there is light at the end of the tunnel. Hope is what brings us together. The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  
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