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Night of the Fireflies  [13+]
Andrea captures something more than she bargained for
by iKïyå§ama
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones" , I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win *Smile*
I’m stalled on Door 9 because I think I’m going to try to combine it with the Quotation Inspiration (good luck doing that *Laugh*) so in the meantime I decided to collect the five reviews in the Mystery genre for Door 10, and here you are! I set my search to 13+ and this showed up. Your twinkling AI picture is inviting, and I hopped right in to see how you handled this prompt.

A sweet story about a little girl and fairies. We see her excitement at catching lightning bugs and her desire to keep them, and then her discovery that they’re actually fairies is well portrayed. It was a good idea to add urgency by making one of them fall ill, and Andrea’s kindness in setting them free is a relief.

I found a typo at one point: “which her snapping her head” there should be a “had” in there between “which” and “her.” Other than that, everything is perfect: the font size, formatting, genre selection, prose, etc. I enjoyed reading it and look forward to browsing more of your collection for this project, if I ever have the time and energy… Thanks for sharing and have fun!

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