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The Man They Left Floating  [13+]
He knew in his heart they wouldn't just leave him.
by Winchester Jones
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Finding my way back Review


Storyline: A man is floating in a raft in the ocean, confident that he will be rescued soon. He replays conversations and the things they've done to him while he waits to be found. He's not wrong in his assumption that they will come to find him, only in what happens when they locate him in the raft. It does seem that some people have no sense of humor, which made this a memorable story.

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Description: Yacht people seem to be a major problem for this onboard cook who makes one little mistake. The Yacht people have taken matters into their own hands after a few incidents that set the cook adrift. You did a good job of showing the events that led to the cook floating and emphasizing how the yacht people reacted to everything that went down on their boat. I did enjoy the cooks rants as we waited for them to come back, so confident that they would and all would be fine afterward.

Dialog: Inner dialog was great. As a reader, you know exactly what the main character feels, who they blame, and what they believe will happen. The dialog gives background information on why he is adrift in the ocean in the first place. A fire, using actual food for bait, drinking all of the wine. The further we get into the story, the funnier it becomes.

Final Thoughts: It was interesting to have the story from one perspective after the fact, but easy to connect the dots of his plights. The references to Yacht people were hilarious. Nothing wrong with incorporating humor while someone is floating in the middle of the ocean, hoping to be rescued. And with that, we don't know if he's still floating out there, but with his insights into all that went wrong on this excursion, I'd bet he still is.



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