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 Loop  [E]
Walking forward doesn't mean you're getting anywhere.
by BattaDratchev
Review of Loop  
Review by Kit
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi BattaDratchev ,

Happy Anniversary month! This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is a very interesting piece. You do an excellent job at setting the scene and allowing the reader to experience the main character's world, and their thoughts and feelings.

I could picture myself there, wandering in the snow - everything is cold, and white, and you're the only one there in what feels like an endless journey. I love that they almost welcome the idea of being trapped in a snow globe, because that would mean that eventually something might change. They would welcome anything other than this.

What this is is left to the reader's interpretation. Something has happened. A major emergency. Is the main character still alive? Where has everyone vanished to? It almost feels like a rapture type of situation. Like I said, it's interesting. And it's well-written.

You are an engaging writer. Excellent choice of words. Excellent spelling and grammar, too. You make it easy to review your work. Well done!

Suggestions:

The fact that you are an excellent writer does mean that finding anything helpful to suggest is far from easy! I would love to be helpful, but you've got it all covered already. The only thing I can think of, and it's a tiny suggestion is:

All the way at the end of the story, 'deja vu' should be déjà vu.

My Rating:

This is a very good piece. I enjoyed the read.

I did have one suggestion but it's tiny. I am not going to mark you down for that. This story deserves a 5 out of 5, and that is what I will give it.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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