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 Review #4723357 |
 | The Wake of Wildfire  [ASR] A secret love affair goes public. (Two strays and two victims makes four.)  |
| (4.0)| A WDC Power Review Hi Joto-Kai .I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Wake of Wildfire" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. I enjoyed the read. Great use of rhyming the second and fourth lines of each stanza. Maybe it's just me, but I like the use of rhymes in poetry. Forbidden desires seems to a common theme--or better, a pastime--for the human race. Few couples slip its embrace.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I found your intermittent use of punctuation and use of caps to begin a line disconcerting. Read your poem out loud and I think you'll hear what I see. Some caps should be small letters and some commas are not needed. For example:(She and I) kept a flame, Forbidden fire, In a secret hearth Away from loving eyes. (She and I) kept a flame. Forbidden fire in a secret hearth away from loving eyes.  My Rating. 4.0.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
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