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 Baby 9 and the Filth-Sucker  [E]
Baby 9 encounters a vacuum cleaner
by MayDay
Review by Past Member 'rupali'
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Undoubtedly, it is a thoughtful short story. We, every people in this material world, struggle randomly for the sake of self-existence. We can perform anything to remain relevant in society. We do not hesitate to adopt the worst possible way when we can not find any other way to survive. Our level of honesty may be compromised if the situation demands that. This is the subject of the story. It is not only uncommon but also very essential. An enthusiastic observation is needed for that. The efficient writer does the same thing.
As a short story, it is almost brilliant except for some technical errors in the formation.
A short story should have a minimum number of characters. The story follows the rule. There are only two characters, Baby 9 and Teen 4. Though Baby 9 is the central character, the character of Teen 4 is equally important.
Every short story must enter into the main story from the beginning. The writer follows the same.
There is no side or sub-story which is ideal for a short story.
Now understand that it is an ideal short story. But, that does not happen here. In reality, the author opts for the descriptive nature that hampers the pace of the story. This is going against the rule of an ideal short story. That is the only error.
Except for that crucial error, overall, performance is satisfactory. Go ahead.


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