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 Expansive Imprint  [E]
A comedic take on the theme of "Expansive Imprint" given to us by a weekly writers group.
by Louis Williams
Review of Expansive Imprint  
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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This is an entertaining story. Concerning a bull in a foxy artist's studio {for a change from the usual china shop) and a visiting vixen art connoisseur, it is full of unhappy accidents and a final fortunate misapprehension by the lady fox that completes the tale. Odd, but fun to read.

I must admit that I don't understand why the characters have to be animals. They behave exactly like humans, so the choice to make them a bull and a couple of foxes seems a little strange. Perhaps it adds a little to the humour of the situation and there {i}is{/i} the bull in a china shop joke, of course. For me, it's a little distracting.

The denouement is also rather predictable - we've all made fun of how easily critics of modern art can be fooled, so it's no surprise when the vixen likes the squashed statue. It's still funny but a little more thought might have produced a truly unexpected outcome that takes the reader by surprise.

It's a charming tale that shows potential in the writing (no problems there) but needs an injection of surprise to give it real pzazz. I note that you've chosen only one of the genres available in the heading. Pick another two (Animal and Arts, for instance) and you'll increase your chances of reaching a wider audience for the piece. You could also increase the font size a little to make things easier for readers with less than perfect eyesight.

Happy writing!

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