This story is brutal at least in this section. It is realistic and shows how tough it was during this time of dragons. I can visualize the characters, actions, scenes, and events. I hope you write more of this story.

In the opening paragraph, you should change [it she] to [if she] typo

Consider please that separating the two events would make the actions more vivid to the reader. [taking effect. A block...] Instead of using stifling twice once and then again in the paragraph right below it you could consider another word or words.

How do these people feel? Are they angry, frightened, sorrowful, in a rage, or other?
What is happening inside them, their emotions and outward emotions?

Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WdC members.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .