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 Kvasir and the Mead of Poetry  [E]
Norse Pagan Mythology - the creation of Kvasir, the wisest being, and the Mead of Poetry.
by Dael Dhra
Review by Beholden
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I must applaud the intent to write a children's version of the tales of Norse mythology. One of my childhood treasures was a book of Norse mythology and the knowledge I gained from it has served me well over the years.

It is a great pity, therefore, that your presentation doesn't assist in the reading of your work. As it is, the reader is presented with a great block of densely-packed text in too small a font. Increase the font size and break the text up into smaller paragraphs, separated by two Returns between each, and the document becomes much more readable. It's hard enough to get readers to bother with lengthy amounts of text on the computer without making the task even more difficult. Lessen the bad first impression of that solid block by inserting some space for the eye to rest in!

Otherwise, you have retold these great stories in a style most suitable to your potential audience, leading the reader into the wonderful drama and scope of those ancient tales. You've done an excellent job.

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