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| Disclaimer: I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! I found this story on Read & Review and enjoyed reading it. There are some strong images here that evoke the emotions of loss, regret, and hope. Your story reminds us that a seance may be just a performance, but signs are where we find them. And they mean what we need them to mean. I especially liked this line: Those things are rumination deathtraps My only suggestion for the story is that the character might muse something like 'I have to tell mom about the bird' as he walks away. My only nit is that the first reference to the mom confused me, I wasn't sure if she was grieving or indifferent. Maybe this could be made more explicit: A mom (of whose son was now) just another case, of just another did you hear what happened to such and such. A mom whose son was heretofore (hereafter) relegated to not more than a statistic the day after the funeral. overall, a good read. Keep writing! Words Whirling 'Round  A poet merely pens a mirror, the reader brings the reflection.        My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/16/2023 @ 4:20pm EDT