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Way Down We Go  [18+]
How low could you go? (~1122 words.)
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Review of Way Down We Go  
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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This one has it all. It's fast paced, bare bones description, solid plot without decoration, straightforward, no-nonsense action that focuses immediately on the goal and takes us there so quickly that we're almost breathless when we reach the end. It's marvellous stuff, perfectly suited to its genre with exactly the required atmosphere of hard-bitten, cynical characters involved in a seedy world of money, booze and violence.

In fact, it's so good that it teeters on the edge of parody. For me, the final touch that pushes me over the edge of credulity is the fact that Pat the Cat is French. I was prepared to accept the outrageous nickname but a beautiful villain who speaks French? It's just a bridge too far. I'd dial it back a bit by allowing her at least one ordinary trait.

It's my opinion only, of course, and I mention it only because the danger with this type of writing is always the temptation to go too far. And I hate being so picky as your writing is so strong, with those short, sharp sentences and paragraphs, plenty of space making it so suitable for the internet and the immediacy of the telling, and the inventive plot. Truth to tell, it's a gem of a tale, superbly related.

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