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 | Dumbledore's Discovery - Proud to win!  [ASR] After his famous thesis on the uses of Dragon's blood, Dumbledore turns his attention ...  |
| (5.0)| Disclaimer: I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! This story popped up on Read & Review and caught my attention. It's a well-written scene that could work as an interlude in a longer story. The dialogue sounds natural to my ear and fits the characters as I remember them from the books. The spelling and grammar are good. The formatting is pleasing to the eye and makes for a pleasant reading experience. I didn't find anything actually wrong to critique. The only suggestion I could offer is not really a critique. This sentence seemed a bit awkward to me: He was always being made to shine his uncle's and cousin's shoes, and his cousin's. Overall, it's a very good piece. Keep writing! Words Whirling 'Round A poet merely pens a mirror, the reader brings the reflection.        My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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