Hello Busman, I happened on your "Unconditionally Yours" at Read and Review. I'm here to give you my thoughts.

First Impression The title touched me. The poem on the page looked organized on the page.

Form Written in 6 unrhymed quatrains with varying length lines. S1, L1 and L2 are repeated in S6 L2 and L3. S5 employs repetition of W1 in each line.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics. This poem reads fluidly out loud. The content logically progresses. I thought S5 was very effective.

Suggestions No technical error jumped out at me. S1, L3, where do you want the reader to focus, on the Years or on of? Last word of a line takes on importance, I think it is best practice to never end a line with a conjunction unless you want to emphasize the conjunction. If this were mine, I would move the word "of" to the beginning of the next line.

I do feel the last line of the poem is redundant and doesn't trust the reader. The reader already gets it. You don't have to tell us. If it were mine, I'd eliminate the last line. or substitute S1 L3 without "of" at the end as your last line. I think it would have more impact.

Of course, this is just one person's opinion. It is your poem, use what ever you may find helpful and ignore the rest.

Overall This is a well crafted poem, touching in places. I enjoyed the read.

~~Tink

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .