Hi Cloud, I happened on your "Lost Dreams" at Read and Review and I'm here to offer you my thoughts on this poem.

First impression The title is pretty generic, I question if it will entice the random reader. The appearance on the page is long which might scare off the casual reader. It is OK it also might attract the more serious readers.

Form Introduced as a song. Normally a song would have verses and a refrain, that happens only once in this piece. The narrator might have a tune to follow but the reader doesn't. The Form I see Free Verse in 54 lines broken into 19 strophes. The first and second strophes are repeated midway in the poem.

Texture, rhythm, word choice, and sonics Short lines make the rhythm a little choppy. Language is simple and easy to understand.

SuggestionsThere are no technical errors that jump out at me. In my opinion, the last strophe is too telly and the poem would have more impact if you deleted the 3rd strophe from the bottome, "That is the lost dream of mine" and the last strophe "But it won't, I know that now" and instead ended this piece repeating your 1st strophe. "A lost dream of mine
Was to be a
Singer" The reader will feel the loss.

These are just my thoughts and it is your poem. Use what you may find helpful here and ignore the rest.

Overall I enjoyed reading this poem. It has a melancholy tone that is conveyed to the reader.

~~Tink

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