Hi francis, I found your "Quotes and Words of Wisdom" on Read and Review. I thought it interesting that there would be such a theme here at WDC and your offering shows up for review. Tough to review just one sentence but I'll give it a try.

This piece is written in one very long sentence which in my opinion could be broken into two sentences. It wouldn't change the rhythm nor the meaning but would give the reader a pause to reflect on one thought before continuing on to the next.

In the first phrase of the sentence you use the phrase "earth and celestial". Earth is a noun, celestial is an adjective. You can't pair them. You could use, "earth and stars", or "earth and universe", or "earth and sky", or "earth and heaven". All of those substitutes are nouns and provide a better rhythm to your thought.

Of course, these is just my opinions. It is your "quote". Use what you find helpful and ignore the rest.

I think words of wisdom are spot on. I especially liked the last phrase and how you end it. That is great rhythm and makes the thought memorable. Almost Yoda like.

~~Tink



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